What do you think is the most serious problem in the world? Why do you think so?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think the climate crisis is the most serious problem in the world.
If it happens, many animals will be died and many people will be died.
So we have to protect the Earth.
If we do that, the Earth will be okay.
I hope we can live safely.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름] Hu!
I agree with you! It really is a serious problem that people should try and solve. Good job on the composition! See you tomorrow! ^^
~~Teacher Kate
>>CORRECT!
If it happens, many animals will be died and many people will be died.
If it happens, many animals will be died and many people will be died.
>>If it happens, many animals and people will die.
So we have to protect the Earth.
So we have to protect the Earth.
>>CORRECT!
If we do that, the Earth will be okay.
If we do that, the Earth will be okay.
>>CORRECT!
I hope we can live safely.
I hope we can live safely.
>>CORRECT!
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