What do you think is the significance of Children\'s Day?
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I think that the significance of Children\'s Day is not important now. In the 1960s, almost every child worked at low salary without rest. So, a man made the Children\'s Day. At that time, it had important meaning. But now, the importance of Children\'s Day is decreasing because the welfare of children is getting better.
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I think that the significance of Children\'s Day is not important now.
>> I think that there\'s not much significance to Children\'s Day now.
In the 1960s, almost every child worked at low salary without rest.
>> In the 1960s, almost every child worked for a low salary without rest.
So, a man made the Children\'s Day.
>> or: That\'s why someone created the Children\'s Day.
At that time, it had important meaning.
>> At that time, it had an important meaning.
But now, the importance of Children\'s Day is decreasing because the welfare of children is getting better.
>> CORRECT~~
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