What do you think is the worst invention ever and why?
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I think that the worst invention is smartphone because it makes children be addicted. Of course, smartphone is surprising invention, but it has a side effect. Due to it, while people eat a meal, they watch videos. Also, some children fight with their parents, because of smartphone. Like these, smartphone is the worst invention, but if we make a rule to use smartphone, we will use smartphones wisely. I hope that we can use our great smartphones wisely.
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Hi Kimberly :)
Using too much of something is never good. Smartphone are great inventions but there should be limitations to it indeed.
>> I think that the worst invention is smartphone because it makes children addicted to using it.
Of course, smartphone is surprising invention, but it has a side effect.
>> Of course, smartphone are great inventions, but they cause some side effects to us.
Due to it, while people eat a meal, they watch videos.
>> People still watch videos on their phones even when they are eating.
Also, some children fight with their parents, because of smartphone.
>> Also, some children fight with their parents because of smartphone.
Like these, smartphone is the worst invention, but if we make a rule to use smartphone, we will use smartphones wisely.
>> Because of these reasons, I think that smartphones are the worst inventions. But if we limit the usage of it, we can use it wisely.
I hope that we can use our great smartphones wisely.
>> CORRECT
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