What do you think is the worst kind of crime?
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I think the worst crime is a child sex offense. There are many kind of people around the world. However, some strangers rape child. And then, some people make a porno with child. Normally, people don\'t try thinking of it. But, only few strangers make a vibe scared. Another crime is a firearm accident only in the USA. Most people in the USA have their guns. That\'s why the firearm accident rate is high. They claim if you don\'t have own gun, you won\'t protect yourself. I can\'t understand the insistence. Of course, the states is the biggest country, the police can\'t control all of the areas. I believe there is an another way.
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Hi, Eric!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
I think the worst crime is a child sex offense.
>> I think the worst crime is a child and sex offense.
There are many kind of people around the world.
>> There are many kinds of people around the world.
However, some strangers rape child.
>> However, some strangers rape a child.
OR >> >> However, some strangers rape children.
And then, some people make a porno with child.
>> And then, some people involve children with pornography.
Normally, people don\'t try thinking of it.
>> Normally, people don\'t try to think about it.
But, only few strangers make a vibe scared.
>> CORRECT!Another crime is a firearm accident only in the USA.
>> CORRECT!Most people in the USA have their guns.
>> CORRECT!That\'s why the firearm accident rate is high.
>> CORRECT!
They claim if you don\'t have own gun, you won\'t protect yourself.
>> They claim that if you don\'t have your own gun, you won\'t be able to protect yourself.
I can\'t understand the insistence.
>> CORRECT!
Of course, the states is the biggest country, the police can\'t control all of the areas.
>> CORRECT!
I believe there is an another way.
>> I believe there is another way.
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