What do you think is your edge over the other applicants?

2013-12-02 · 첨삭 강사 Kristel

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It is so interesting subject to write my opinion. well.. If I compare to the other applicats, I think my advantage is 'confidence'. Actually I don't have great grade or high points of TOEIC. But I have confidence. I did a lot of activity such as marketing program, sudent reporter, volunteer work and hiking my country. After doing that, I gained a lots of things. I learned the communication skills and responsbility that we couldn't learn in shcool. So, I have my own experience which is significant to me. And that is so rare experinece so I never think I am not better than other guys. Because of these points, I always think I'm having a confidence.

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Hello there [이름]!! A pleasant morning to you.. Good job to this writing! Anyway, always be positive and keep that great confidence in you. Just don\'t over do it..kkk Too much confidence sometimes leads to being arrogant so be mindful of that! ^^ Have a great day~~~ T.Kristel- It is so interesting subject to write my opinion. >> It is a very interesting topic to write my opinion.well.. If I compare to the other applicats, I think my advantage is \'confidence\'. >> Well, if I compare myself to the other applicants, I think my greatest advantage is my \"confidence\".Actually I don\'t have great grade or high points of TOEIC. But I have confidence. >> Actually I don\'t have great grades or high points in TOEIC but I have confidence. I did a lot of activity such as marketing program, sudent reporter, volunteer work and hiking my country. >> I did a lot of extra curricular activities such as being  a marketing programmer, a student reporter, a volunteer and a hiker around the country.After doing that, I gained a lots of things. I learned the communication skills and responsbility that we couldn\'t learn in shcool. >> After doing those, I learned a lot of things.  I learned communication skills and responsbility that we couldn\'t learn in shcool.So, I have my own experience which is significant to me. And that is so rare experinece so I never think I am not better than other guys. >> So, I have a personal experience which is very significant to me. Besides. that is a rare experience so I never thought I am not better than other guys.Because of these points, I always think I\'m having a confidence. >> Because of these points, I always think confidently.

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