What do you think is your main purpose in life?

2022-01-22 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I think this question is difficult. My main purpose is to be happy with people around me. I want to be happy with people around me because I think being happy makes me solve any problem and bear in any situation. Most of all, I want to see people\'s face which have a big smile. And I want to be a worthy person. I hope that I can be used for society. It is difficult for me to make dreams come true but I want to do my best to make my dreams come true. I\'m looking forward to my future.

강사 첨삭

Hi Kimberly:) 

You area worthy person. You make a lot of people happy and inspired. I am one of them. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your first homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I think this question is difficult. 
>> CORRECT

My main purpose is to be happy with people around me. 
>> My main purpose is to be happy with the people around me. 

I want to be happy with people around me because I think being happy makes me solve any problem and bear in any situation.
>>  It is because being happy  makes me solve my problems and bear with the situations. 

Most of all, I want to see people\'s face which have a big smile. 
>> Most of all, I want to see people\'s faces when they have a big smile. 

And I want to be a worthy person. 
>> CORRECT

I hope that I can be used for society. 
>> I hope that I can be used for the society. 

It is difficult for me to make dreams come true but I want to do my best to make my dreams come true. 
>> It is difficult for me to make my dreams come true but I want to do my best to make it come true. 

I\'m looking forward to my future
>> CORRECT

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