What do you think makes a company event successful?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think it requires clear event objectives, thorough planning and preparation to achieve those goals, and active participation from the attendees.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Jayjay!
Thank you for doing your homework.
~T. Divina^^
Here are some things to consider:
1. I think it requires clear event objectives, thorough planning and preparation to achieve those goals, and active participation from the attendees.
>>CORRECT!
OR>>I think it requires clear event objectives, thorough planning and preparation to achieve those goals, as well as active participation from the attendees.
(The suggested version is more natural in terms of sentence flow.)
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