What do you think makes you attractive?
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The answer might be to find and to develop my inner beauty. It means that focusing on raising my own abilities is rather than caring others’ reputations commonly mentioned as attraction points.
For example, I really want to be taller and more handsome than now, but these dreams are untouchable. In contrast, I can get better body shape through working out, and I can have a more favourable impression with a lot of smiles when I meet someone.
When we are young, we might easily keep our eyes onto the given aspects of attractions. Because all of ourselves are so attractive. However, sadly, we would be losing it, one by ony, during getting old. On the other hand, our attactions made by our habits or efforts would have been getting polished and emitting bright light.
This is not only about appearances. Strong and modest mindset and highly filed wises are also the attraction points which we can make bigger through our lives.
Only the problem might be that I usually forget or ignore them.
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What do you think makes you attractive?
The answer might be to find and to develop my inner beauty.
>>CORRECT!
It means that focusing on raising my own abilities is rather than caring others’ reputations commonly mentioned as attraction points.
>>It means that focusing on enhancing my own abilities is better than caring for other\'s reputation, which commonly counts as an attractive point.
For example, I really want to be taller and more handsome than now, but these dreams are untouchable.
>>CORRECT!
In contrast, I can get better body shape through working out, and I can have a more favourable impression with a lot of smiles when I meet someone.
>>In contrast, I can get a better body shape through work out, and I can have a more favorable impression with a lot of smiles when I meet someone.
When we are young, we might easily keep our eyes onto the given aspects of attractions.
>>When we are young, we easily keep our eyes onto the given aspects of attraction.
Because all of ourselves are so attractive.
>>Because all of us are so attractive.
However, sadly, we would be losing it, one by ony, during getting old.
>>However, sad to say, we will be losing it one by one as we are getting older.
On the other hand, our attactions made by our habits or efforts would have been getting polished and emitting bright light.
>>On the other hand, our attractions made by our habits or efforts would have been polished and emitting a bright light.
This is not only about appearances.
>>It is not only about appearances.
Strong and modest mindset and highly filed wises are also the attraction points which we can make bigger through our lives.
>>Strong and modest mindset and highly filed wises are also attractive points which we can make bigger through our lives.
Only the problem might be that I usually forget or ignore them.
>>The only problem might be is that I usually forget or ignore them.
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