what do you think of a career in the army?
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First of all, Having a career in the army and Someone who should make the supreme sacrifice for their own countries are very proud of themselves.
Of course, as much as It\'s a matter of life and death.
It might be difficult to choose army, While thinking about their\'s future plans.
So, I think we should respect their noble spirit of their own country in everyday life.
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Good day, Ella!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. CamilleFirst of all, Having a career in the army and Someone who should make the supreme sacrifice for their own countries are very proud of themselves.
>> First of all, having a career in the army, and someone who should make the supreme sacrifice for their own countries are very proud of themselves.
Of course, as much as It\'s a matter of life and death.
>> CORRECT!
It might be difficult to choose army, While thinking about their\'s future plans.
>> It might be difficult to choose army, while thinking about their future plans.
So, I think we should respect their noble spirit of their own country in everyday life.
>> CORRECT!
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