What do you think of adoption?
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Hi [이름]! Thanks for sharing your opinions. Honestly, I have thought of adopting a child. I even think of that until now.
But my husband doesn\'t allow me to do so. He doesn\'t want to raise other people\'s child. We have different philosophies
and opinions when it comes to adoption. I love children and I would love to raise a child even if not mine. I would be very
proud seeing a child growing in my own hands and seeing them living a happy and successful life. It\'s just a way of helping a
person, too. But we are all different. Not everyone has successful stories. See you later. ^^
~~Teacher May~~
There is nothing bad about adaption.
I am sure that it is one of the choices if parents who can\'t have children.
>> CORRECT
The adopted child will be cared very well by foster parents and parents will be thankful for having a child and getting a great life with harmonious family.
>> The adopted child will be raised very well by foster parents and the parents will be thankful for having a child and a great family.
However, if parents already have a baby and they decide to adopt a child, I am not sure they can treat all children equally.
>> However, if parents already have a baby and they adopted a child, I don\'t think they can treat all their children equally.
I have thought that if I have adopted, I can treat adopted children like my child.
>> I have thought that if I have adopted a child, I could treat him/her like my real child.
My final decision is that I don\'t think I can give same love to all and there will be a lot of problem occurred.
>> I don\'t think I can give the same love and there would be a lot of problems that might occur.
I believe that parents who adopted are entitled to get respect and they are living another life with new family.
>> I believe that foster parents should also be respected for they are living another life with a new family.
Our government provide some advantages if parents adopt children such as adoption leave and supportive money.
>> Our government provides some benefits for parents who adopt children such as adoption leave and budget.
It is still needed to more support for foster parents, if country would like to boost people to adopt a child.
>> It is still needed to have more support for foster parents, if a country like to encourage people to adopt a child.
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