What do you think of bigamy and polygamy?
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Hello Sir [이름]!
Good evening! I am so happy with your ideas tonight.
You made me laugh when I read last part of your essay.
You are right, I am also wondering why some people have two wives or husbands?
I don\'t know how they handle the pressure. You made my week! Thank you!
Talk to you soon! Have a marvelous week with your family. Take Care!
Teacher Nina
Morally, I think people should have a right to choose a living arrangement that suits the individuals.
>> Morally, I think people should have the right to choose a living arrangement that suits them as individuals.
The assumption here is that all individual have a choice.
>> Correct
In the case of polygamy, there is a likely chance that some of the wives may not have the choice.
>> In the case of polygamy, there is likely a chance that some of the wives may not have the choice.
>> OR: In the case of polygamy, there are chances that some of the wives didn\'t have a choice.
Within polygynous societies, only a righ and powerful man can afford to have more than one wife.
>> Correct!
>> OR: In polygamous societies, only a right and powerful man can afford to have more than one wife.
In a lot of cases, the women are forced into these marriages, way under the age of consent.
>> In most cases, the women are forced into these marriages, way under the age of consent.
And, multiple wives often become a status symbol denoting wealth, power, and fame.
>> Correct!
Our society should protect the poor, weak people, and the underprivileged.
>> Correct!
>> Better: Our society should protect the poor, weak, and the underprivileged people.
Apart from all the social, political, and moral issues, I personally wonder why anyone would want another wife.
>> Correct!
It is hard for me to handle just one wife.
>> Correct!
Imagine having two bickering and nagging wives who may be in competition over you or over themselves, would you be happy with living in that way?
>> Imagine having two bickering and nagging wives who may be in competition over you or over themselves, would you be happy living that way?
How can you raise 10 or 20 children?
>> Correct!
Even raising one kid is a significant burdon for me.
>> Correct ( Spelling check: burden ^^)
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