What do you think of cosmetic surgery?
학생이 쓴 원문
I don\'t prefer the cosmetic surgery. But I also tried the cosmetic surgery.
I tried double eyelid surgery. Nowadays the double eyelid surgery is common thing. And I think this is the problems. Any surgery are dangerous. It couldn\'t be a common, or light things. Young people are want to try cosmetic surgery to be make a beautiful face, body. It is a sad phenomenon.
I think they watched beautiful stars on TV shows, or on Youtube.
Also It would be a disadvantages of media.
Cosmetic surgery has a serious side effects. If it comes, they would be lose
their face and never turn back. We should be learn this part before to be a adult. Excessive surgery should be avoided. Natural is the best.
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Hi there, [이름] [이름]!
Thank you for accomplishing this writing activity. Keep on practicing English because every day you learn new vocabulary and patterns. It\'s better you do something to improve instead of delaying the results. ^^
Thank you for accomplishing this writing activity. Keep on practicing English because every day you learn new vocabulary and patterns. It\'s better you do something to improve instead of delaying the results. ^^
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>>I don\'t prefer cosmetic surgery.
But I also tried the cosmetic surgery.
I think they watched beautiful stars on TV shows, or on Youtube.
Also It would be a disadvantages of media.
Cosmetic surgery has a serious side effects.
>> But I also tried doing it.
I tried double eyelid surgery. >>Correct.
>>Or: I had double eyelid surgery.
Nowadays the double eyelid surgery is common thing.
>> Nowadays, this kind of surgery is very common among Koreans.
And I think this is the problems.
>> And I think this is a problem.
Any surgery are dangerous.
>>All surgeries are dangerous.
It couldn\'t be a common, or light things.
>> It couldn\'t be considered a common thing or something normal.
Young people are want to try cosmetic surgery to be make a beautiful face, body.
>> Young people want to try cosmetic surgery to have a beautiful face and body.
It is a sad phenomenon.
>>Correct.
>> I think they watched a lot of beautiful stars on TV shows or on YouTube.
>>OR: They might be influenced by entertainers online or through media.
>> It is also the disadvantage of media.
>> Cosmetic surgery has many serious side effects.
If it comes, they would be lose
their face and never turn back.
their face and never turn back.
>> It it happens, they might lose their face and never turn back.
We should be learn this part before to be a adult.
>>We should learn this part beforehand to become a matured person.
Excessive surgery should be avoided.
>> Excessive surgery should be avoided.
>> Or: Surgery is meant for people who had serious accident effects on their body.
Natural is the best.
>> Correct.
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