What do you think of drivers who decorate their cars with soft toys?

2016-08-09 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I have never thought about this issue before, probably,i i haven't had any car that i can decorate. Grown up with my father who always wants to be clean, whenever i look around my father's car, there's nothing decorated with. when i reflected myself about my computer,cellphone background,room, i am likely to make it a basic version or quite clean room as it is like a new room without useless items. But we can't define their preference about the people who want to make up their cars more plentiful. On a second thought, they might think some people who don't want to cover their empty part with a toy, think they don't have any hobbies to enjoy their life more happily. But as for me, even if i have mentioned about myself as not being a person who wants to decorate, i am willing to put pretty soft toys which would be given by precious person or souvenir to show them i had been there!

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Good evening [이름]! I am so happy that you really expressed your thoughts in a nice way. I just want to remind you of some missed out words. ^^ We need to enhance your vocabulary skill more. ^^ Do you like stuff toys when you were young? I appreciate that you did your best to compose great sentences. Keep it up! Always use an adjective to describe things. ^^ I am glad to help you improve your skills further. ^^ See you tomorrow. Good night and sweet dreams. Teacher Nina   I have never thought about this issue before, probably,i i haven\'t had any car that i can decorate. >> I have never thought about this issue before, probably because I haven\'t had any car that I can decorate. ( Don\'t forget because for reasoning. ^^) Grown up with my father who always wants to be clean, whenever i look around my father\'s car, there\'s nothing decorated with. >> Better: Growing up with my father who always wants to be clean, there\'s nothing decorated with it whenever i look around my father\'s car. ( You were talking about the time you spent with your dad. ^^ ) when i reflected myself about my computer,cellphone background,room, i am likely to make it a basic version or quite clean room as it is like a new room without useless items. >> Did you mean: When I reflected about myself, I realized that my computer, wallpaper of my cellphone and room, I am likely to make it a basic version or quite clean room as it is like a new room without useless items. ( Make your descrpiption more specific and check the missed words. ^^) But we can\'t define their preference about the people who want to make up their cars more plentiful. >> Did you mean: But we can\'t define their preference, the people who want to make up their cars more creative.  ( Use an adjective ^^) >> OR: But we can\'t define their preference about the people who want to make up their cars with a lot of things in it. On a second thought, they might think some people who don\'t want to cover their empty part with a toy, think they don\'t have any hobbies to enjoy their life more happily. >> On a second thought, they might think that some people who don\'t want to cover their things with a toy, think that they don\'t have any hobbies to enjoy their life. ( Be careful with your word order. ^^) >> OR: On a second thought, they might think some people who don\'t want to cover their empty part with a toy, think that they don\'t have any hobbies to make their life happier. But as for me, even if i have mentioned about myself as not being a person who wants to decorate, i am willing to put pretty soft toys which would be given by precious person or souvenir to show them i had been there! >>  But as for me, even if I have mentioned that I am not a person who wants to decorate, I am willing to put pretty soft toys which would be given by precious people or souvenirs to show other people that I had been to different places.

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