What do you think of skydiving as a hobby?
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Absolutely yes, I want to do that if I can do. But, it would cost a lot than other hobbies. I paid around 500 dollars yesterday , only one time. And if I make that my hobby, I need to get a license. Also, getting a license is to dive at least 15 times. And then, I will have a qualification to test. So, I think skydiving could be a hobby if I have money a lot and time. On top of that, my left ear is so sensitive about the ear pressure. I\'ll consider it when I get a chance. :)
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Hi, Eric!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille
Absolutely yes, I want to do that if I can do.
>> Absolutely yes, I want to do that if I can.
But, it would cost a lot than other hobbies.
>> CORRECT!
I paid around 500 dollars yesterday, only one time.
>> CORRECT!
And if I make that my hobby, I need to get a license.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> And if I turn that as my hobby, I need to get a license.
Also, getting a license is to dive at least 15 times.
>> Also, getting a license means one has to dive at least 15 times.
And then, I will have a qualification to test.
>> And then, I will have a qualification test.
So, I think skydiving could be a hobby if I have money a lot and time.
>> CORRECT!
On top of that, my left ear is so sensitive about the ear pressure.
>> On top of that, my left ear is so sensitive because of the ear pressure.
I\'ll consider it when I get a chance. :)
>> CORRECT!
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