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A month ago, I recently purchased a new smart phone G3.I paid around US 900 dollars (approximately 36,000 pesos.) Actually I am not that kind of person who is an early adapter or crazy about a new advanced gadget. However, I purchased a new phone a day before the new regulation was implemented on Oct. 1, 2014. The new law is related to the smart phone subsidy and distribution, mainly aiming to ban the mobile carriers from offering the excessive subsidy of more than 300,000 won per unit. The Apple iPhone 6 was launched last Friday in Korea and from midnight Saturday through Sunday morning last week, crowds lined up in front of smartphone stores to receive so-called guerrilla subsidies because they have been popping up since Friday, as retailers offer illegal subsidies of as much as 700,000 won although its regular price was 789,800 won.As a result, buyers were able to get their hands on the iPhone 6 for 4,000 to 8,000 pesos. I am not a big fan of iPhones, but I regret I missed the deal.
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Happy hump day Sir [이름]!
I hope that you are having a fantastic day.Oh my god! If I am also in your shoes, I will feel sad.
That one was a great deal.
iPhone 6 is really expensive in my country.
There are a lot of people who want it but they have to sign a contract for two years if they don\'t have cash.
I\'m envious. Hihihihi. I hope that I was in Korea at that time. Hahahaha.
Talk to you soon.
Teacher Nina
A month ago, I recently purchased a new smart phone G3.
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I paid around US 900 dollars (approximately 36,000 pesos.)
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Actually I am not that kind of person who is an early adapter or crazy about a new advanced gadget.
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However, I purchased a new phone a day before the new regulation was implemented on Oct. 1, 2014.
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The new law is related to the smart phone subsidy and distribution, mainly aiming to ban the mobile carriers from offering the excessive subsidy of more than 300,000 won per unit.
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The Apple iPhone 6 was launched last Friday in Korea and from midnight Saturday through Sunday morning last week, crowds lined up in front of smartphone stores to receive so-called guerrilla subsidies because they have been popping up since Friday, as retailers offer illegal subsidies of as much as 700,000 won although its regular price was 789,800 won.
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>> OR: The Apple iPhone 6 was launched last Friday in Korea and from Saturday midnight until Sunday morning last week, crowds lined up in front of smartphone stores to receive the so-called guerrilla subsidies. Because they have been popping up since Friday, as retailers offer illegal subsidies of as much as 700,000 won although its regular price was 789,800 won.
As a result, buyers were able to get their hands on the iPhone 6 for 4,000 to 8,000 pesos.
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>> OR: As a result, buyers were able to get their new gadget iPhone 6 for 4,000 to 8,000 pesos only.
I am not a big fan of iPhones, but I regret I missed the deal.
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>> OR: I\'m not a big fan of iPhones but I regret that I missed the deal.
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