What do you think of the idea that people have the right to do whatever they want with their bodies?
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I agree that we have the right to do whatever we want with our bodies.
>>CORRECT!
>>I admit that we have the authority to do whatever we want with our bodies.
But, if it is illegal, we don’t have to do that.
>>CORRECT!
>>But, if it\'s banned, then let\'s have to follow it.
We have two reason why we don’t do that.
>> We have two reasons why we don’t do that.
First, we belong to the community.
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>>Primarily, we belong to certain community.
We make the regulation called the law to live together and to maintain the peace and order.
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If some people didn’t follow the rules, the society will be mess and confused soon.
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>>The society will be messed up if some won\'t follow.
Also, we don’t have the right to violate the other people’ right.
>>Also, we don’t have the right to violate the other people’s right.
My right is very important and other’s also.
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>>My right is important and so as them.
We have to protect each other.
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For example, we can take drugs with our bodies by ourselves.
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It is not problem because it affect only our bodies.
>>It is not problem because it affects only our bodies.
But, drug make other crimes like violation.
>>But, drug makes other crimes like violation.
It affect other peoples who don’t take the drugs.
>>It affects other people who don’t take the drugs.
So, our society prohibit to take the drugs and we should follow the law.
>>CORRECT!
Although we have the right to do anything in our bodies, we can’t do everything as we want.
>>CORRECT!
Because we have the duty to follow the rules and not to violate other people’s right.
>> Because we have a duty to follow the rules and not to violate other people’s rights.
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