What do you think of the leadership of your country?

2017-06-20 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Thesedays, the president`s policies will be comparable to leading contries policies. For example, previous president hide installing some weapons that called THAAD in korea. Eventhough it is neccessary to protect contry, They have to talk with citizen efficiently. but new president always explain why it is neccessary and conversate with experts to check utilities and negotiate with opposite opinion. it lead to best policies. second, he consider as environment by call off build a nuclear power plants. today the goverment announced the news that instead of expand running time of outdated facilites, he decide to stop to operate it to follow safety precautions. he just will introduce eco-system by developing some technical skills. these things are the biggiest difference in comparasion with past. so, I advocate his alternative and method.

강사 첨삭

Hello JM!!!
Thank you for your homework but I guess you need to check the corrections that I\'ve made so that you\'ll not commit the same mistake.
I hope you\'ll continue to learn English to that you can enhance your skills in English.
T. Jeny

Thesedays, the president`s policies will be comparable to leading contries policies.
>>These days, the president\'s policies will be the same with other leading countries\' policies.
For example, previous president hide installing some weapons that called THAAD in korea.
>>For example, the previous president hid the installation of some weapons called THAAD in Korea.
Eventhough it is neccessary to protect contry, They have to talk with citizen efficiently.
>>Even though, it is necessary to protect the country, they have to inform the citizens efficiently.
but new president always explain why it is neccessary and conversate with experts to check utilities and negotiate with opposite opinion.
>>But the new president always explains, why it is necessary to ask an expert in order to check the utilities and get an opposite opinion about it.
it lead to best policies.
>>It will lead to the best policies.
second, he consider as environment by call off build a nuclear power plants.
>>Secondly, he considers the environment by calling off the building of the nuclear power plants.
today the goverment announced the news that instead of expand running time of outdated facilites, he decide to stop to operate it to follow safety precautions.
>>Today, the government announced that instead of using outdated facilities, he decided to stop the operation to follow safety precautions.
he just will introduce eco-system by developing some technical skills.
>>He will just introduce an Eco-system by developing some technical skills.
these things are the biggiest difference in comparasion with past. so, I advocate his alternative and method.
>>These things are the biggest difference in comparison with the past, so I advocate his alternative methods.

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