What do you think of traveling amid the pandemic?

2021-12-09 · 첨삭 강사 Debbie

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In fact, traveling during the pandemic could be dangerous and inconvenient because there are many things for my family to be more careful about than usual. However, I think it is okay if I keep social distancing during a trip. When I went to some travel destinations during the pandemic, I could see that they were not crowded than usual so that I could experience unexpected convenience to enjoy tourist attractions that usually required a long waiting time. But on the other hand, I felt sorry to see the difficulties of the travel destinations and the shopping malls and restaurants around them. Anyway, as a father of three children in a time of learning, I can\'t stop traveling which broaden their horizons. Of course, Keeping social distnacing rules during a trip could be a good experience for them and also a chance for them to think about public interest.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Steve!  Thank you for doing your homework! However, you have to be more careful with sentence construction. 

- Debbie

In fact, traveling during the pandemic could be dangerous and inconvenient because there are many things for my family to be more careful about than usual.
>> Traveling during the pandemic could be more dangerous and inconvenient because my family should be careful with more things than usual.

However, I think it is okay if I keep social distancing during a trip.
>> This is a good sentence! 

When I went to some travel destinations during the pandemic, I could see that they were not crowded than usual so that I could experience unexpected convenience to enjoy tourist attractions that usually required a long waiting time. But on the other hand, I felt sorry to see the difficulties of the travel destinations and the shopping malls and restaurants around them.
>> When I went to some travel destinations during this pandemic, they were not crowded as usual. I felt sorry to see their difficulties as well as the difficulties of the shopping malls and restaurants around them. In the past, people had to wait in line for a long time to enjoy them.

Anyway, as a father of three children in a time of learning, I can\'t stop traveling which broaden their horizons. 
>> As a father of three, I can\'t stop traveling, which broadens their horizons in this time of learning. 

Of course, Keeping social distnacing rules during a trip could be a good experience for them and also a chance for them to think about public interest.
>> Of course, keeping social distancing during a trip could be a good experience for them and a chance to think about the public interest.

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