What do you think rural populations think about the pollution and mess cities are creating?
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People in rural areas usually live here all through their years. So They might feel sick at the hustle and bustle of the city and polluted air. Moreover, the lifestyle of the city is totally different from the one of the country, where people are more inclined to care for each other. As the story of a city mouse and a country mouse shows us, many people from country to city will head back to the country because of the city’s cold individualism and polluted environments.
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What do you think rural populations think about the pollution and mess cities are creating?
People in rural areas usually live here all through their years.
>> OR: Rural people have mostly lived here all their life.
So They might feel sick at the hustle and bustle of the city and polluted air.
>> So they might feel sick and tired of the hustle and bustle of the city and polluted air.
>> OR: Consquently, they might feel sick owing to the hustle and bustle of the city and polluted air.
Moreover, the lifestyle of the city is totally different from the one of the country, where people are more inclined to care for each other.
>> Moreover, the lifestyle in the city is totally different from the one in the country, where people are more inclined to care for each other.
As the story of a city mouse and a country mouse shows us, many people from country to city will head back to the country because of the city’s cold individualism and polluted environments.
>> OR: As shown in the story of a city mouse and a country mouse, many people from the country who moved to the city will eventually head back to the country because of the city\'s cold individualism and polluted environment.
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