What do you think should be done to improve living conditions in your city?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think there needs to be a place to take a rest in order to improve in my city. For example a city forest with nature. And there should be a place to enjoy cultural life. Lastly, It\'s important to get along well with your neighbors. :)
강사 첨삭
Hi Elic:)
That\'s true. There should be a place for people to unwind in. Living in a city can be very hectic so having a place to relax in would be perfect.
I think there needs to be a place to take a rest in order to improve in my city.
>> I think there needs to be a place where we can take a rest to improve my city.
For example a city forest with nature.
>> For example, there should be a forest in a city so we can see nature.
And there should be a place to enjoy cultural life.
>> There should also be a place where we can enjoy our culture.
Lastly, It\'s important to get along well with your neighbors. :)
>> Lastly, it\'s important to get along well with your neighbors. :)
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