What do you think should be done to improve living conditions in your city?
학생이 쓴 원문
In my opinion, we should be more polite to one another, then, the city will be more peaceful.
A few days ago, one person killed other person only because of bumping into each other\'s shoulders.
This terrible thing happened because of their less polite.
And I think Koreans are not that polite to one another.
So I think we should be more polite to one another.
Of course our living conditions are important, but I think these kinds of problems are more important.
If we think one another more than before, we might be able to change this world more peaceful.
강사 첨삭
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I was shocked with what you said. Some people have very short tempers. I hope this won\'t happen again.
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In my opinion, we should be more polite to one another, then, the city will be more peaceful.
>> In my opinion, we should be more polite to one another, the the city will be more peaceful.
A few days ago, one person killed other person only because of bumping into each other\'s shoulders.
>> A few days ago, one person killed another person only because of bumping into each other\'s shoulders.
This terrible thing happened because of their less polite.
>> This terrible thing happened because of their impolite attitudes.
And I think Koreans are not that polite to one another.
>> CORRECT
So I think we should be more polite to one another.
>> CORRECT
Of course our living conditions are important, but I think these kinds of problems are more important.
>> CORRECT
If we think one another more than before, we might be able to change this world more peaceful.
>> If we consider each other more that before, we we might make this world more peaceful.
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