What do you think should the government do about homeless people?

2022-01-09 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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It\'s a tough question in the worldwide. First, the government should increase jobs, and then It needs to make sure people who are with bad identities can work in my personal opinion.

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This is a good idea. Maybe this can be a great impact for them to get back on their feet and make their lives better.

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It\'s a tough question in the worldwide.

>> It\'s a tough question worldwide.

First, the government should increase jobs, and then It needs to make sure people who are with bad identities can work in my personal opinion.

>> First, the government should increase jobs. Then, they need to make sure that people who have bad identities can still work, based on my personal opinion.

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