What do you think soldiers find the most difficult to get used to?

2014-10-06 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Your freedom will be severely restricted in the military. Your individualism won’t be allowed. There is no freedom at all. Exaggeratedly, there is a saying that you don’t have freedom to dream by yourself or on your own. Even dreaming should be approved and controlled by the authoritarian. You cannot get out of the military compound without a special approval. You cannot call, neither see your girl friend or parents. Living with other people will be difficult and stressful as well. There is no space or time only for you. You have to get up at the same time, to eat together, to get a drill, and to sleep at the same time. You should act as a part of a clock. It was quite usual for the Korean army that as many as 10 to 20 soldiers live together in the same room (now it might have changed, but it was when I served in the military about 20 years ago). Even in the barrack, you have to follow the rank hierarchy and you cannot lie down without a permission.

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Good Monday to you Sir [이름]! How was your long weekend? Did you have a great time with your family? I hope so. Thank you so much for sharing about your experience when you were in the military. Now, I was able to understand why some people say that it\'s really difficult. I feel great that you were able to overcome all the challenges you had. I am so proud of you. I hope that we are going to have more topics to talk about. Talk to you soon. Teacher Nina   Your freedom will be severely restricted in the military. >> Correct! Your individualism won’t be allowed. >> Correct! There is no freedom at all. >> Correct! Exaggeratedly, there is a saying that you don’t have freedom to dream by yourself or on your own. >> Correct! Even dreaming should be approved and controlled by the authoritarian. >> Correct! You cannot get out of the military compound without a special approval. >> Correct! You cannot call, neither see your girl friend or parents. >> Correct! Living with other people will be difficult and stressful as well. >> Correct! There is no space or time only for you. >> Correct! >> OR: There is no space or time for yourself. You have to get up at the same time, to eat together, to get a drill, and to sleep at the same time. >> Correct! >> OR: You have to get up, sleep at the same time, eat together and get a drill. You should act as a part of a clock. >> Correct! It was quite usual for the Korean army that as many as 10 to 20 soldiers live together in the same room (now it might have changed, but it was when I served in the military about 20 years ago). >> Correct! Even in the barrack, you have to follow the rank hierarchy and you cannot lie down without a permission. >> Correct!

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