What do you think the best age is to be? (I am confused, so I wrote it to the tomorrow writing page,
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If I changed my age, I would become 15 years old. Korean parents let their children have studied hard only since middle school. So Korean students have never thought about what they like and don\\\'t like and what kind of jobs to be in the world. That\\\'s because they don\\\'t have to time enough so that Korean parents push their children good scores. Korean parents want their children to get comfortable and admirable jobs like a doctor, judge, and lawyer. Most of the students try to meet their parents\\\' expectations. (But nowadays, young students often want to be Youtuber and K-pop stars.) However, they freak out after getting jobs. That\\\'s because they don\\\'t know what to do and why they have to. In my opinion, they have to think about what to do and why to do in their adolescence. It is better to live by themself and overcome many obstacles. I know I can\\\'t return in my adolescence. So I would give time to my child to think about his/her future if I had a child. The freer, the better res
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Hi there, [이름]!
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- T. Rina ^^
1. If I changed my age, I would become 15 years old.
>> If I can change my age, I would become 15 years old again.
2. Korean parents let their children have studied hard only since middle school.
>> Korean parents only let their children study hard until middle school.
3. So Korean students have never thought about what they like and don\\\'t like and what kind of jobs to be in the world.
>> So, Korean students have never thought about what they like and dislike, they also don\'t know what kind of jobs they would have in the world.
4. That\\\'s because they don\\\'t have to time enough so that Korean parents push their children good scores.
>> That\'s because they don\'t have enough time and Korean parents push their children to get good scores.
5. Korean parents want their children to get comfortable and admirable jobs like a doctor, judge, and lawyer.
>> Korean parents want their children to get comfortable and admirable jobs like a doctor, judge, or lawyer.
6. Most of the students try to meet their parents\\\' expectations.
>> CORRECT!
7. (But nowadays, young students often want to be Youtuber and K-pop stars.)
>> But nowadays, young students often want to be Youtubers and K-pop stars.
8. However, they freak out after getting jobs.
>> CORRECT!.
9. That\\\'s because they don\\\'t know what to do and why they have to.
>> CORRECT!
10. In my opinion, they have to think about what to do and why to do in their adolescence.
>> In my opinion, they have to think about what to do and why they have to do things in their adolescence.
11. It is better to live by themself and overcome many obstacles.
>> It is better to live by themselves and overcome many obstacles.
12. I know I can\\\'t return in my adolescence.
>> CORRECT!
13. So I would give time to my child to think about his/her future if I had a child.
>> CORRECT!
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