What do you think the government should do to make the cultural outing experience better?
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Hello [이름] [이름]. Thank you for this. This is actually a good thing. I heard a lot of elderly people suffer form depression because of lack of social activities to do. This thing you mentioned, classes for elderly people I cultural facilities, would help them get together and enhance their social life.
- Y. Beth
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korea culture center and library that run by government show aged person and childerens movies for free.
>>> Korea culture center and library which are run by government show aged people and children movies for free.
I think free cultural events must be notificated to the citizen.
>>> I think free cultural events must be notified to the citizen.
That is because no matter how explaining various cultural outings, elderly person always consider spenditures.
>>> That is because no matter how they explain about various cultural outings, elderly people always consider expenditures.
If the government makes class for the seniors in cultural center, It would do to make the cultural outing experience better as most aged person are afraid of learing somthing new.
>>> If the government provide classes for the seniors in cultural centers, it would make the cultural outing experience better as most aged people are afraid of learing something new.
They knows the fact that class run by government and cosist of similiar age, They can easily access that facilities.
>>> If they knew about those classes provided by the government and it consists participants of similar age, they would easily access those facilities.
Some cultural company give a benefits and supports for the senior.
>>> Some cultural companies give benefits and supports to seniors.
Theirs friendly policies will link to expand aged person`s attedence rate.
>>> Their friendly policies will link to expanding aged person`s attedence rate.
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