What do you think the internet will be like in 20 years?

2025-09-17 · 첨삭 강사 Divina

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The internet will be deeply integrated into our lives. We mainly access the internet via a computer or smartphone. But in the future, devices such as smartwatches and smart glasses, as well as homes, cars, and even entire cities, will be connected and operate autonomously through the internet. AI may analyze users’ habits, preferences, and even emotional states to provide tailored information and services. While data protection technologies will improve, hacking and surveillance issues may also become more complex.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Jayjay!

Thank you for doing your homework.

~T. Divina^^

Here are some notes for correction:

1. The internet will be deeply integrated into our lives.

>>CORRECT!

2. We mainly access the internet via a computer or smartphone.

>>We mainly access the internet via computers or smartphones.

3. But in the future, devices such as smartwatches and smart glasses, as well as homes, cars, and even entire cities, will be connected and operate autonomously through the internet.

>>In the future, however, devices such as smartwatches, smart glasses, homes, cars, and even entire cities will be connected and operate autonomously through the internet.

4. AI may analyze users’ habits, preferences, and even emotional states to provide tailored information and services.

>>AI may analyze users’ habits, preferences, and even emotional states to deliver personalized information and services.

5. While data protection technologies will improve, hacking and surveillance issues may also become more complex.

>>Although data protection technologies will improve, hacking and surveillance issues may also grow more complex.

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