what do you think the world would be like without music?
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What do you think the world would be like without music?
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In my opinion that will be gloomy world.
>>In my opinion that will be a gloomy world.
I think the people could not feel a lot of emotions, when the people watch the movie, the dance, the festival.
>>I think people could not feel a lot of emotions, when people watch movie, dance, or festival.
Let\'s imagine that two tango dancers are dancing hard on stage to audience. But there is no music.
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It looks like little a bit awkward. Because the music play a important role in many entertainment to touch people mind.
>>It looks like little a bit awkward because music plays an important role in many entertainment to touch people.
The music is important part to help that to know feeling many kind of be moved.
>>Music is important to help and to know feelings of many kind which can be moved.
>>OR: Music is important to move feelings.
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