What do you think we could do better or differently?
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Apart from the terminal, I am aware that your company also provides a financial news service. As a three-year subscriber, I found the news helpful because I could navigate through audiovisual platforms such as podcasts. However, I believe the user base would grow if the articles consisted of friendlier terminology. I found out non-financial market professionals had difficulty navigating the financial market via Bloomberg article from specialist-oriented content. Accordingly, many resort to Youtube videos to get a complete insight of the analysis and professionals remarks. Since these comprehensions include a summary of the paper and the streamers\' perspective, many people tend to believe the entire content as a Bloomberg analysis. Using familiar vocabulary might be against the characteristic of the article to be full of professionalism. Still, I assume that the company could increase its customer base by adopting more terms on the report to align with individual investment boosts.
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Hello Aciel! Thank you for this!
Apart from the terminal, I am aware that your company also provides a financial news service.
Apart from the terminal, I am aware that your company also provides a financial news service.
>>> correct
As a three-year subscriber, I found the news helpful because I could navigate through audiovisual platforms such as podcasts.
>>> correct
However, I believe the user base would grow if the articles consisted of friendlier terminology.
>>> correct
>>> OR: However, I believe it would be more user-friendly if the articles consisted of simpler and more common terminology.
I found out non-financial market professionals had difficulty navigating the financial market via Bloomberg article from specialist-oriented content.
>>> correct
Accordingly, many resort to Youtube videos to get a complete insight of the analysis and professionals remarks.
>>> correct
Since these comprehensions include a summary of the paper and the streamers\' perspective, many people tend to believe the entire content as a Bloomberg analysis.
>>> correct
Using familiar vocabulary might be against the characteristic of the article to be full of professionalism.
>>> correct
>>> OR: Using basic and common vocabulary might abate the professional characteristic of the article.
Still, I assume that the company could increase its customer base by adopting more terms on the report to align with individual investment boosts.
>>> correct
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