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2014-09-01 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I feel scared when I hear news reports on the spread of Ebola virus, bird flu, or other serious diseases. It is quite natural that people are sensitive and respond actively to such news reports because they feel that they could fall victims to the diseases. Not only general citizens, but also even economy is affected by them. When the bird flu occurs and spreads out, consumption of chickens sharply drops and the stock value of the companies selling the products decreases. Whereas people look for other substitute products like pork. Ebola virus is widely spreading these days and all the countries are making their all-out effort to keep it from flowing into their countries and affecting their people by screening each single person at the immigration. In the African region, some countries are prohibiting people from moving to other regions, blocking the roads although it is doubtful whether it will be effective. The world is becomming dangerous because new fatal diseases are emerging.

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Hello there Sir [이름]^^ Happy first day of September. I hope that you are having a great day. How was your weekend? Your composition is really nice. ^^ I love it when I hear new things and ideas from you.Ebola virus is really scary. We should know the symptoms of the disease and how we should make our body fit. Thank for your time. Talk to you very soon. Teacher Nina   I feel scared when I hear news reports on the spread of Ebola virus, bird flu, or other serious diseases. >> Correct >> OR: I feel scared when I hear about the spread of Ebola virus, bird flu or othr serious diseases on the news. It is quite natural that people are sensitive and respond actively to such news reports because they feel that they could fall victims to the diseases. >> It is quite natural that people are sensitive and respond actively to such news reports because they feel that they could fall as victims to the diseases. >> OR: It is quite natural that people are senstive and respond actively to such news because they feel that they might acquire it if not prevented. Not only general citizens, but also even economy is affected by them. >> Correct >> OR: Not only general citizens, but also even the economy is affected. When the bird flu occurs and spreads out, consumption of chickens sharply drops and the stock value of the companies selling the products decreases. >> Correct Whereas people look for other substitute products like pork. >> Correct Ebola virus is widely spreading these days and all the countries are making their all-out effort to keep it from flowing into their countries and affecting their people by screening each single person at the immigration. >> Correct In the African region, some countries are prohibiting people from moving to other regions, blocking the roads although it is doubtful whether it will be effective. >> Correct The world is becomming dangerous because new fatal diseases are emerging. >> Correct

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