What do you think when you see a homeless person? What are some reasons that people become homeless?
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Thanks for sharing your opinions [이름]! I am also aware of that. In the Philippines, we can also
see them around specially in Manila.
~~Teacher May~~
I am really wondering why homeless people are on the street or in the subway station.
I believe that every person has their stories and something forced them out of their house.
>> CORRECT
However, few people just do\'t want to have a job and they feel annoying if they are in the society.
>> However, few people just do\'t want to work and they feel annoyed if they are in the society.
I know most homeless people need help from us and our society but there are few people who deceive citizens by pretending to be sick.
>> I know many homeless people need help from us and our society but there are a few people who just pretend to be sick.
It is easy to see homeless people if we go to the Seoul train station.
>> We can see homeless people in Seoul train station.
They rarely wash and it cause bad smell all around the station.
>> They rarely wash themselves and it makes the station stinky.
Existing on the street or in the station make commuters feel uncomfortable.
>> Staying on the street or in the station make commuters feel uncomfortable.
It is their choice to stay out of home.
>> It is their decision to leave their home.
However, I want them to get help from the government or city officials.
>> However, I want them to seek help from the city officials.
As I know, there are a lot of program to help them in our city and some cities provide shelters for them.
>> As far as I know, there are a lot of programs that can help them and some cities provide shelters.
I heard that there are few restriction if they stay in a shelter.
>> I heard that there are few restrictions if they stay in the shelter.
They should not drink an alcohol, limited smoking breaks and keep time to get home.
>> They should not drink alcohol, limited smoking breaks and a curfew.
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