What do you think will be the implication if common household appliances will continue to lose their
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It is hard to find people who don’t have a smartphone in Korea, especially young people.
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As percentage of using smartphone is increased, many applications are also developing and many companies deal with applications as new business.
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For example, delivering application named yogiyo affects meal of one person household.
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Through delivering apps, ordering is easier than before and people who felt convenient don’t often cook in house.
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Also, smartphones also affect TV.
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It is possible to watch TV programs using smartphone apps like Netflix.
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So, number of people who watch live broadcasting decreased and it is disappearing to watch TV with family at dinner.
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Some household appliances like radio are already substituted by other things.
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I think it is natural phenomenon according to development of technology as becoming extinct uncompetitive animal from long ago.
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