What do you think will foreigners like and dislike about living in your town or city? Why?

2015-09-10 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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There are more than 1.7 million foreign workers here in Korea. The number has tripled over the couple of years. A large portion of the foreign population is from Asian countries. Korea lacks work force in industries that require hard physical work, while Korean people are not willing to work there. The reason for the massive influx of foreign workers is because the labor cost is relatively high compared with other east-Asian countries. So workers can earn five or even ten times more here than they do in their own countries. There are industrial cities where most foreign workers reside. The cities are quite safe, clean and have convenient public transportation system so that they can easily move. Big discount stores and marts are everywhere. Restaurants and bars are open 24/7. Delivery service is fantastic, so you can order in food or even daily necessities. There are some difficulties that they face on a daily basis. Korea is a homogeneous society and racism still exists.

강사 첨삭

Hi Sir [이름]!

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A lot of people want to work overseas because of higher compensation.

I guess foreigners will have love your country.

Thank you so much for your time.

Have a fun day.
Teacher Nina


There are more than 1.7 million foreign workers here in Korea.

>> correct

The number has tripled over the couple of years.

>> correct

A large portion of the foreign population is from Asian countries.

>> correct

Korea lacks work force in industries that require hard physical work, while Korean people are not willing to work there.

>> Korea lacks work force in industries that require physical hard work, while Korean people are not willing to work there.

The reason for the massive influx of foreign workers is because the labor cost is relatively high compared with other east-Asian countries.

>> correct

So workers can earn five or even ten times more here than they do in their own countries.

>> correct

There are industrial cities where most foreign workers reside.

>> correct

The cities are quite safe, clean and have convenient public transportation system so that they can easily move.

>> correct

Big discount stores and marts are everywhere.

>> correct

Restaurants and bars are open 24/7.

>> correct

Delivery service is fantastic, so you can order in food or even daily necessities.

>> Delivery service is fantastic, so you can order food or even daily necessities.

There are some difficulties that they face on a daily basis.

>> correct

Korea is a homogeneous society and racism still exists.

>> correct

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