What do you think would be the hardest thing for you to give up? Why would it be hard to lose?

2015-05-27 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

I like sweet foods and sweet fruits. I prefer pears to apples. Just like children, I like sweets as well such as snacks, chocolates, ice-creams, and cakes. I as well aware of the harmful effect of eating sugary food too much, however, I cannot stop it. I do have some digestion problems related to the colon syndrome. Some health experts say that drinking vinegar regularly greatly helps to promote cleansing of your body. It also can cure joint pain, digestive distress and blood disorders. It can destroy harmful bacteria in the digestive tract, creating more efficient digestion and elimination of waste. Vinegar’s ability to break up fat helped improve the functioning of the liver and kidneys, whose primary role is to detoxify the body. However, I cannot drink vinegar because of its sour taste and bad smell. I feel like vomiting when I even think of it. I wonder if there are any other substitutes that can have the same effect of vinegar, but it is easy to eat or drink.

강사 첨삭

Great afternoon to you!

Happy mid-week, Sir [이름]!

I agree with you. Eating sweets is really difficult to stop. Hihihihi.

I often crave for chocolates or cakes.

Vinegar has a lot of benefits.
Oh! Sir [이름], how about trying apple cider vinegar.
You might like it. ^^ It is good.

I hope that you are going to have something special tonight.

Talk to you in class.

Thanks for your time.
Teacher Nina


I like sweet foods and sweet fruits.

>> correct

>> OR: I like sweet foods and fruits.

I prefer pears to apples.

>> correct

>> OR: I prefer pears than apples.

Just like children, I like sweets as well such as snacks, chocolates, ice-creams, and cakes.

>> correct

I as well aware of the harmful effect of eating sugary food too much, however, I cannot stop it.

>> I am as well aware of the harmful effect of eating too much sugar, however, I cannot stop it.

>> OR: I am as well aware of the bad effects of eating too much sweet foods. However, I can\'t stop it.

I do have some digestion problems related to the colon syndrome.

>> I do have some digestion problems related to colon syndrome.

>> OR: I have some digestion problems related to colon syndrome.

Some health experts say that drinking vinegar regularly greatly helps to promote cleansing of your body.

>> Better: Some health experts say that drinking vinegar regularly promotes cleansing of your body.

It also can cure joint pain, digestive distress and blood disorders.

>> correct

It can destroy harmful bacteria in the digestive tract, creating more efficient digestion and elimination of waste.

>> correct

Vinegar’s ability to break up fat helped improve the functioning of the liver and kidneys, whose primary role is to detoxify the body.

>> correct

However, I cannot drink vinegar because of its sour taste and bad smell.

>> correct

I feel like vomiting when I even think of it.

>> I feel like vomiting even when I think of it.

I wonder if there are any other substitutes that can have the same effect of vinegar, but it is easy to eat or drink.

>> correct

>> OR: I wonder if there are any other substitutes that can have the same effect of vinegar, but easier to drink or eat.

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