What do you think would happen if the drinking age in your country was lowered to eighteen?

2015-09-24 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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The drinking age in Korea is 19. The 19 years of old is the time when you enter college. So, normally students start drinking after going to college. Lowering the drinking age to 18 won’t make any difference, although it might have symbolic meaning that even high school seniors can drink legally. Enforcing the law to crack down shops or bars that sell alcohol to teenagers is not so strict that they can easily buy beer or Soju at their neighborhood if they want. I don’t think that there are high school students who don’t drink because of the law. Drinking or not for them has little to do with the legal drinking age. Regardless of the law, teenagers will drink if they want. So, it is dependent on their will, rather than the regulation. The majority of high school students do not drink because they have to study hard in preparation for the college entrance exam. Of course, lowering the drinking age might make it much easier for them to drink because they can easily access alcohol.

강사 첨삭

You are definitely right. ^^

It is a person\'s will to drink is the main reason to have access in alcoholic beverages.
I guess one factor that contributes to that is also peer pressure and environment.

Your ideas that are written below are really appreciated, Sir [이름].

There are some teenagers that even if they are not allowed to drink, they still go to bars.

Or some make fake IDs and change their age or date of birth, dress up like a college or working person.

Thanks for your informative composition. Have a great day.
Teacher Nina


The drinking age in Korea is 19.

>> correct

The 19 years of old is the time when you enter college.

>> Did you mean: The time when you enter college is at the age of nineteen.

So, normally students start drinking after going to college.

>> correct

Lowering the drinking age to 18 won’t make any difference, although it might have symbolic meaning that even high school seniors can drink legally.

>> correct

Enforcing the law to crack down shops or bars that sell alcohol to teenagers is not so strict that they can easily buy beer or Soju at their neighborhood if they want.

>> correct

I don’t think that there are high school students who don’t drink because of the law.

>> correct

Drinking or not for them has little to do with the legal drinking age.

>> correct

Regardless of the law, teenagers will drink if they want.

>> correct

So, it is dependent on their will, rather than the regulation.

>> correct

The majority of high school students do not drink because they have to study hard in preparation for the college entrance exam.

>> correct

Of course, lowering the drinking age might make it much easier for them to drink because they can easily access alcohol.

>> correct

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