What do you think would happen if there were no music in the world?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think it\'s going to be a unhappy and boring world.
Music is a big part of everyday life not only for me but for others. If you look at me, I think I will have a hard time spending time if I listen to music in various situation such as exercising or driving and there is no music. In addition, music raises people\'s emotions and inspires other fidles, but without music, that cannot happen. For example, if you propose to create a romantic atmosphere with music that fits the atmosphere and lead the other person\'s approval, if there is no music, it will be a boring proposal as if something is missing.
강사 첨삭
Hi!
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I totally agree that it is going to be a very unhappy and boring world if music doesn\'t exist.
~ Teacher Gina
I think it\'s going to be a unhappy and boring world.
>> I think it’s going to be an unhappy and boring world.
Music is a big part of everyday life not only for me but for others.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Music is essential in daily life for many people, including me.
If you look at me, I think I will have a hard time spending time if I listen to music in various situation such as exercising or driving and there is no music.
>> Personally, I would have a hard time doing activities like exercising or driving if there were no music.
In addition, music raises people\'s emotions and inspires other fidles, but without music, that cannot happen.
>> In addition, music influences people’s emotions and inspires other fields, which would not happen without music.
For example, if you propose to create a romantic atmosphere with music that fits the atmosphere and lead the other person\'s approval, if there is no music, it will be a boring proposal as if something is missing.
>> For example, when you propose and create a romantic atmosphere with suitable music, it helps gain the other person’s approval. Without music, the proposal may feel boring as if something is missing.
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