What do you think would your life be when you retired? Explain your answer.
학생이 쓴 원문
Actually, I don\'t want to retire because there is nothing I will do after I retired.
I can travel a lot of places after I retired but I think working other job will more interesting to me.
If I retired hip-hop artist, than I can do painter or something that is very simple and easy to do.
For instance, I can paint after I retired, and I can make hip-hop melodies after I retired.
So I will do something that is very simple and easy to do after I retired.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! ^^
The beginning of retirement marks the start of a new chapter, not the end of the book. And whether you’re already nearing your golden years or you’ve got plenty of time left in your career. There will be so many things to look forward to when you retire. :)
Actually, I don\'t want to retire because there is nothing I will do after I retired.
I can travel a lot of places after I retired but I think working other job will more interesting to me.
If I retired hip-hop artist, than I can do painter or something that is very simple and easy to do.
For instance, I can paint after I retired, and I can make hip-hop melodies after I retired.
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I can travel a lot of places after I retired but I think working other job will more interesting to me.
>> I can travel to a lot of places after I retiring but I think working on another job will more interesting to me.
If I retired hip-hop artist, than I can do painter or something that is very simple and easy to do.
>> If I retire as a hip-hop artist, then I can be a painter or something. That is very simple and easy to do.
For instance, I can paint after I retired, and I can make hip-hop melodies after I retired.
>> For instance, I can paint after retiring and I can make hip-hop melodies too.
So I will do something that is very simple and easy to do after I retired.
>> So I will do something that is very simple and easy to do after I retiring.
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