What do you think your biggest "life changing" moment? Tell me about it. (in not more than 8 sentenc

2018-12-18 · 첨삭 강사 Ally

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What do you think your biggest "life changing" moment? Tell me about it. (in not more than 8 sentences) 1. Back in my university days, I commuted school by subway which ran according to a railroad schedule. 2. While other subway lines ran every 3 to 10 minutes, my line ran 2 to 4 times in an hour. 3. I used to be so obsessive that I couldn’t allow myself to miss the time. 4. I used to be that kind of person in general. 5. One day I was going to the subway station with my friend and he used the same line to commute school as well. 6. I told him “Hurry up. We have to run not to miss the train. If we miss it, we have to wait 15 minutes at least for the next one” 7. He said, “Take your time, buddy! I am happy to have more 15 minutes to talk to each other.” 8. That’s when I acknowledged the real difference between wasting meaningless and spending on the valuable. -- Ally! I have to postpone the class. See you on Friday!

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

You never fail to amaze me with your life lessons.

This is one of the best compositions you\'ve made so far! ^^

I think it really is important to know the difference between wasting time on nothing and valuing time with our loved ones.

Keep up the good work!

P.S. See you on Friday then. Don\'t forget to hold your class on the website. ^^

~~t. Ally

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1. Back in my university days, I commuted school by subway which ran according to a railroad schedule.

>> Back in my university days, I commuted to school via the subway, which ran according to the railroad schedule.

2. While other subway lines ran every 3 to 10 minutes, my line ran 2 to 4 times in an hour.

>> CORRECT!

3. I used to be so obsessive that I couldn’t allow myself to miss the time.

>>I used to be so obsessive that I wouldn\'t allow myself to miss the time.

4. I used to be that kind of person in general.

>> CORRECT!

5. One day I was going to the subway station with my friend and he used the same line to commute school as well.

>> One day, I was going to the subway station with my friend, and he used the same line to commute to school as well.

6. I told him “Hurry up. We have to run not to miss the train. If we miss it, we have to wait 15 minutes at least for the next one”

>> CORRECT!

OR >> I told him to hurt up or we\'ll miss the train and we\'ll have to wait for 15 minutes to catch the next one.

7. He said, “Take your time, buddy! I am happy to have more 15 minutes to talk to each other.”

>> He said, \"Take your time, buddy! I am happy to have 15 minutes more to talk with you.\"

OR>> He told me to take my time because he was happy to have 15 minutes more to talk with me.

8. That’s when I acknowledged the real difference between wasting meaningless and spending on the valuable.

>> That\'s when I realized the real difference between wasting meaningless time and spending it on valuable moments with others.

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