What do you use social media for?

2022-12-16 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

학생이 쓴 원문

I use social media for interaction. I can\'t meet all of my friends often. Social media helps me to maintain relationship with them. I can ask after my friends and share recent news. It makes us feel closer even though we can\'t meet often. For example, I took this semester off so, I stayed in Pocheon where it is far from my university. Furthermore, Because I had to prepare certificates, I can\'t make free times as well as before. But, I can keep maintaining relationship through social media like instagram and kakaotalk. Also, there are lots of interesting contents. I can\'t recognize the speed of time. So, whenever I have free time or before go to bed, I usually use social media. That\'s why social media is dangerous. We can be easily addicted to it. Rather than supplying exact information, there are many fake news. Sometimes, even I wonder it is right information. In result, people who use social media as entertainment should distinguish from fakes and be careful of being addicted.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this Mary. Have a good day!

I use social media for interaction. 
>>>  correct
I can\'t meet all of my friends often. 
>>> correct  
Social media helps me to maintain relationship with them. 
>>> correct  
I can ask after my friends and share recent news. 
>>>  correct
>>> OR: I can ask about my friends and share recent news. 
It makes us feel closer even though we can\'t meet often. 
>>> correct  
For example, I took this semester off so, I stayed in Pocheon where it is far from my university. 
>>> correct  
Furthermore, because I had to prepare certificates, I can\'t make free times as well as before. 
>>> ORFurthermore, because I had to prepare for certifications, I couldn\'t make free times as much as before.  
But, I can keep maintaining relationship through social media like instagram and kakaotalk. 
>>> correct  
Also, there are lots of interesting contents.
>>> correct  
 I can\'t recognize the speed of time. 
>>> OR: I lose track of time.  
So, whenever I have free time or before go to bed, I usually use social media. 
>>>  So, whenever I have free time or before going to bed, I usually use social media.  
That\'s why social media is dangerous. 
>>>   correct   
We can be easily addicted to it. 
>>>  correct    
Rather than supplying exact information, there are many fake news. 
>>>   correct   
Sometimes, even I wonder it is right information. 
>>> Sometimes, I even wonder if it is a right information.   
In result, people who use social media as entertainment should distinguish from fakes and be careful of being addicted.
>>>   In result, people who use social media as entertainment should distinguish fakes from facts and be careful of being addicted.

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