What do you usually do on New Year\'s Day?
학생이 쓴 원문
On New Year’s Day, We have usually family gathering, Sometimes we have a family trip. We celebrate the first day of the new year and hold korean traditional ancestral rites to remember our ancestors. However, my family is all Christians, so we do not follow the traditional way, but worship in a Christian style.
강사 첨삭
Happy day, [이름] Ki! I really appreciate your time and effort in sharing your New Year activities. I can\'t wait for the Christmas and New Year\' holidays. Let\'s have fun and enjoy every moment. We will talk more in class. I will see you then. Take care always! ~T. Lyn
On New Year’s Day, We have usually family gathering,
>>There is usually a family gathering on New Year\'s Day.
Sometimes we have a family trip.
>>We sometimes go on family trips.
We celebrate the first day of the new year and hold korean traditional ancestral rites to remember our ancestors.
>>On the first day of the New Year, we hold a traditional Korean ancestral rite to remember our ancestors.
However, my family is all Christians, so we do not follow the traditional way, but worship in a Christian style.
>>However, because my family is all Christians, we worship in a Christian way instead of following the traditional way.
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