What do you usually do to celebrate birthdays in your family?
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My children draw fan-art, they hung it on a door to show me. When I come back home after work, I saw it before pushing door bell, and it made me happy. I could have excellent dinner what I ordered to my wife. After dinner, my daughter turned off a lamp to sing \'Happy birthday song\'. But nobody gives present to me.
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Hello [이름]ny,
Thank for your sharing this with me. This is a very sweet story :D
Regards,
T. Angelica
My children draw fan-art, they hung it on a door to show me. >> My children drew fanart for my birthday and they hung it on the door to show me.
When I come back home after work, I saw it before pushing door bell, and it made me happy.
>> When I came back home after work, I saw it before pushing the door bell and it made me happy.
I could have excellent dinner what I ordered to my wife.
>> I told my wife that I wanted an excellent dinner
OR>> I had an excellent dinner made by my wife.
After dinner, my daughter turned off a lamp to sing \'Happy birthday song\'.
>> After dinner, my daughter turned off a lamp to sing \'Happy Birthday\'.
But nobody gives present to me.
>> But nobody gave me a present.
OR >>But nobody gives me presents.
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