What do you usually do when the weather is so cold in Busan?
학생이 쓴 원문
When the weather is cold, I recommend indoor activities.
Many of the activities I do now are indoor activities.
Violin practice, electronic recorder and calimba practice, indoor golf practice, exercise in the gym, reading a books etc. are all done indoors.
If there\'s something that\'s unfortunate, I can\'t watch Netflix movies and go to the movie theater often because I don\'t have time to watch movies.
But even if it\'s cold, I\'m satisfied with myself doing hard for something.
Winter is the season to prepare for my better appearance in warm spring.
강사 첨삭
Hi David! I just wanted to let you know that I thoroughly enjoyed reading your responses to the topic. Your points were thoughtful and engaging, making the discussion even more interesting. Keep up the great work!
~ T. Lia
When the weather is cold, I recommend indoor activities.
>> CORRECT
Many of the activities I do now are indoor activities.
>> CORRECT
Violin practice, electronic recorder and calimba practice, indoor golf practice, exercise in the gym, reading a books etc. are all done indoors.
>> Violin practice, electronic recorder and kalimba practice, indoor golf practice, exercising in the gym, reading books, etc., are all done indoors.
If there\'s something that\'s unfortunate, I can\'t watch Netflix movies and go to the movie theater often because I don\'t have time to watch movies.
>> If there\'s something unfortunate, it\'s that I can\'t watch Netflix movies or go to the movie theater often because I don\'t have time to watch movies.
But even if it\'s cold, I\'m satisfied with myself doing hard for something.
>> But even if it\'s cold, I\'m satisfied with myself for working hard on something.
Winter is the season to prepare for my better appearance in warm spring.
>> Winter is the season to prepare for a better version of myself in the warm spring.
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