What do you usually wish for during your birthday?
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On my birthday, I wish that I can have the happiest time. But..... it is not easy. Suddenly, something bad happens without any predictions. However, thanks to many people around me, I can have a better time. So, I\'m thankful to people around me. Also, on my birthday, I wish that I can eat delicious dishes. I think my father is knowing my wish. So, my father takes me and my family to the delicious restaurant.
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Hi Kimberly:)
That sounds like a fun birthday!
On my birthday, I wish that I can have the happiest time.
>> CORRECT
But..... it is not easy. Suddenly, something bad happens without any predictions.
>> But is is not easy. Often times, something bad happens without me predicting it.
However, thanks to many people around me, I can have a better time.
>> CORRECT
So, I\'m thankful to people around me.
>>So, I\'m thankful for the people around me.
Also, on my birthday, I wish that I can eat delicious dishes.
>>CORRECT
I think my father is knowing my wish.
>> I think my father knows my wisher.
So, my father takes me and my family to the delicious restaurant
>> So my father usually takes me and my family to a delicious restaurant.
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