What do you want to accomplish this year?
학생이 쓴 원문
In the beginning of this year, I made my new year resolutions. My key resolutions include improving English speaking & writing skill, learning golf, and seeking an opportunity to work abroad. The reasons for setting my goals as such were that golf is not anymore just one of sports, but rather it became a prerequisite for a businessman to do business here in Korea. Looking for job outside is because I definitely need working experience in other countries to expose myself to muti-national working environments, which is needed for my career development. Needless to say, English is a basic tool for me to perform my daily jobs. Now, eight months have passed and only four months left to the end of this year. When I self-assess the progress, I’m still far behind the targeted levels. I have not yet started playing golf and neither made efforts to actively find a job to work outside Korea. Even my English speaking & writing skills have not improved a lot. I have a long way to go.
강사 첨삭
Hello Good afternoon Sir [이름] ^^
It\'s the fourth day of the week! I hope that your week is doing great.
Thank you for sharing your goals this year and I hope that you will be able to achieve all of them.
In terms of your English skills, just stay focused, don\'t give up.
Patience is really needed when learning. English is really important in our life, take every step as a challenge for you to reach your dreams.
Stay motivated and aim higher. I know you can do it!
Take Care! See you in class!Teacher Nina
In the beginning of this year, I made my new year resolutions.
>> Correct!
My key resolutions include improving English speaking & writing skill, learning golf, and seeking an opportunity to work abroad.
>> Correct!
>> OR: My resolutions are improving English speaking & writing skill, learning golf, and seeking an opportunity to work abroad.
The reasons for setting my goals as such were that golf is not anymore just one of sports, but rather it became a prerequisite for a businessman to do business here in Korea.
>> The reasons for setting my goals as such were that golf is not anymore just a sport, but rather it became a pre-requisite for a businessman to do business here in Korea.
>> OR: One of my goal is to learn how to play golf. Golf is not anymore just a sport, but rather it became a pre-requisite for a businessman to do business here in Korea.
Looking for job outside is because I definitely need working experience in other countries to expose myself to muti-national working environments, which is needed for my career development.
>> Looking for job outside Korea is also one because I definitely need working experience in other countries to expose myself to muti-national working environments, which is needed for the development of my career.
>> OR: Looking for a job outside Korea is also one of my goals. I definitely need working experience in other countries to expose myself to multi-national working environments which is needed for my career development.
Needless to say, English is a basic tool for me to perform my daily jobs.
>> Correct!
>> OR: English is a basic tool for me to perform my task everyday.
Now, eight months have passed and only four months left to the end of this year.
>> Now, eight months have passed and there are only four months left to end this year.
>> OR: Eight months have passed and there are only four months left before a new year begins.
When I self-assess the progress, I’m still far behind the targeted levels.
>> When I assessed myself in terms of progress, I\'m still far behind my targeted levels.
>> OR: When I assessed myself, I\'m still far behind to reach my goals.
I have not yet started playing golf and neither made efforts to actively find a job to work outside Korea.
>> I have not yet started playing golf and neither made efforts to actively find a job outside Korea.
>> OR: I have not yet started playing golf and neither made efforts in order for me to work outside Korea.
Even my English speaking & writing skills have not improved a lot.
>> Even my English speaking and writing skills didn\'t improve a lot.
I have a long way to go.
>> I still have a long way to go.
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