What do you want to achieve for your health in the next 5years?
학생이 쓴 원문
Today, people consider their health a lot, because our environment is getting worse and many kind if diseases come up everyday.
Therefore, I am planing to have two new habits and settle them in next 5 years.
First, I will not angry at anybody as much as possible.
Mistly, I have been exhausted after I was angry at someone or something. Exporing anger needs plenty of energy.
Second, I will drink at least 6cups of water.
I havn\'t enjoyed drinking juice, water and other liquid thing except coffee.
Those two things are that I should achive in next 5 years.
강사 첨삭
Good morning Young Won!
These two things are very achievable. If you have a supportive environment and a very good self control, these are good as done.
I will track your improvement too, don\'t worry. =)
Stay fit, healthy, and happy always.
-T. Donna =)
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Therefore, I am planing to have two new habits and settle them in next 5 years.
>> Therefore, I am planning to have two new habits and settle them in the next 5 years.
First, I will not angry at anybody as much as possible.
>> First, I will not be angry with anybody as much as possible.
Mistly, I have been exhausted after I was angry at someone or something. Exporing anger needs plenty of energy.
>> Correct!
Or: Spelling: Mostly; Exploring
Second, I will drink at least 6cups of water.
>> Correct!
I havn\'t enjoyed drinking juice, water and other liquid thing except coffee.
>> I haven\'t enjoyed drinking juice, water, and other liquid things except for coffee.
Those two things are that I should achive in next 5 years.
>> Those two things are what I should achieve in the next 5 years.
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