What do you want to include in your ideal fitness program?
학생이 쓴 원문
I would like to include cardio excersies and some activites for my mental health.
Cardio excercises like running and cycling can improve endurance. It\'s more helpful with group than alone because I can do it consistenly.
I also think program for mental health is as important as physical health program because stress is an enemy of our physical health.
Therefore, I would like to include programs for mental health such as yoga and meditation.
Strength training is needed for making muscles and great body shape, so I will include it after recovering my condition enough.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Great job! You expressed your ideas clearly and showed good understanding of the connection between physical and mental health. Just be careful with spelling — “exercises” (not excersies) — and use plural nouns correctly, such as “programs” instead of “program.” Try to combine shorter sentences for smoother flow next time. Overall, well done!
~Teacher Polly
>>I would like to include cardio exercises and some activities for my mental health.
Cardio excercises like running and cycling can improve endurance.
>>Cardio exercises like running and cycling can improve endurance.
It\'s more helpful with group than alone because I can do it consistenly.
>>They are more helpful when done in a group than alone because I can do them more consistently.
I also think program for mental health is as important as physical health program because stress is an enemy of our physical health.
>>I also think programs for mental health are as important as physical health programs because stress is an enemy of our physical health.
Therefore, I would like to include programs for mental health such as yoga and meditation.
>>Therefore, I would like to include activities for mental health, such as yoga and meditation.
Strength training is needed for making muscles and great body shape, so I will include it after recovering my condition enough.
>>Strength training is also necessary for building muscles and maintaining a great body shape, so I will include it after I recover from my condition fully.
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