What do you worry about getting older?

2023-01-26 · 첨삭 강사 Mika

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Whether you believe it or not, I am not afraid of getting old. I’d rather think getting old is great and mysterious because getting old helps me to get more knowledge, or insight into life and myself. To put this the other way around, it means that if I don\'t get old enough, I can\'t understand the world and myself. Therefore, I am not worrying about getting older, but welcome it. However, if you get older, you have more things to be more careful about because you get weak physically, and mentally. So if you try to keep healthy physically and mentally, you don’t need to be concerned about getting old. And you also need to get ready financially. In Korea, people above 60 or 61 years old have to retire from their work. They usually have to get by on a pension which is not enough for their livelihoods. So If you are well-prepared for getting old physically and financially, getting old can become a blessing with much wisdom and insight into the world and yourself.

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Wonderful Thursday to you, [이름] K[이름]. Make the most of this day. Laugh, love, learn, and dream. Just be happy. Live every moment. I am always here for you ^^

I’d rather think getting old is great and mysterious because getting old helps me to get more knowledge, or insight into life and myself.
>> I\'d rather think that getting old is a great and at the same time a mysterious thing because it helps me to gain more knowledge or insight about myself and life.
However, if you get older, you have more things to be more careful about because you get weak physically, and mentally.
>> However, if you get older, you should be more cautious about a lot of things especially getting physically and mentally weak.
So if you try to keep healthy physically and mentally, you don’t need to be concerned about getting old.
>> If you don\'t want to worry about getting old, then you should keep yourself physically and mentally healthy.

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