What does it take to keep an eye on something well? (What it takes - the skills and personality need

2021-10-14 · 첨삭 강사 Faith

학생이 쓴 원문

It takes to keep on eye on my baby well, I need to pay attention to her first. Especially since she cannot still speak well yet, I always have to check her needs and feelings. I always try to imagine that if I were her. So I can catch her needs faster than my husband. However, It\'s not enough. I need to keep observing and studying her development because she keeps growing up. Second, I have to be healthy because it is so labor demanding. When I\'m extremely tired, it\'s hard to take care of my baby. Also, I could lose my smile. When I\'m a happy mom, my daughter also can feel happy. Third, As I observed her growth, I thought about what I was growing up. I want to show my daughter my growth. Even though I don\'t speak English well now, I try to study English every night during her sleep. The reason is that I want to converse with her in English deeply. As much as I can, I will do my best for her. In the future, I want to tell her about your mom\'s growing story. Thank you so much! Faith!

강사 첨삭

Great job, Jane! Your daughter must be so happy reading this if she has a chance in the future!-Faith-
It takes to keep on eye on my baby well, I need to pay attention to her first. 
>> It takes my full attention to keep an eye on my baby well.
Especially since she cannot still speak well yet, I always have to check her needs and feelings. 
>> Most especially that she cannot still speak well yet, I always have to check her needs and feelings. 
I always try to imagine that if I were her. So I can catch her needs faster than my husband. 
>> I always try to imagine that I were her so I could catch her needs faster than my husband. 
OR I always put myself in her shoes so I could catch her needs faster than my husband. 
However, It\'s not enough. 
>> CORRECT
I need to keep observing and studying her development because she keeps growing up. 
>> First, I need to keep observing and studying her development because she keeps growing up. 
Second, I have to be healthy because it is so labor demanding. 
>> Second, I have to be healthy because it is so labor demanding. 
When I\'m extremely tired, it\'s hard to take care of my baby. 
>> CORRECT
OR When I\'m worn out, it\'s hard to take care of my baby. 
Also, I could lose my smile. 
>> CORRECT
When I\'m a happy mom, my daughter also can feel happy. 
>> CORRECT
Third, As I observed her growth, I thought about what I was growing up. 
>> Third, as I observe her growth, I thought about what I was growing up. 
I want to show my daughter my growth. 
>> CORRECT
Even though I don\'t speak English well now, I try to study English every night during her sleep. 
>> Even though I can\'t speak English well now, I try to study English every night during her sleep. 
The reason is that I want to converse with her in English deeply. 
>> The reason is that I want to converse with her in English deeply someday. 
As much as I can, I will do my best for her. 
>> CORRECT
In the future, I want to tell her about your mom\'s growing story.
In the future, I want to tell her about her mom\'s English development story.
Thank you so much! Faith!
>> CORRECT

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·