What does the ideal life look like?

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I have read a book named \"Never mind\".

>> Correct!

This book told us that everybody need to accept or agree life is painful.

>> This book told us that everybody needs to accept or agree that life is painful.

We are able to be happy when we overcome our misfortune.

>> Correct!

Of course, if I had huge money, I would be happy.

>> Of course, if I have a lot of money, I would be happy.

>> OR: Of course, if I have more money, I would become happier.
I think the ideal life is having a enough spare time after work without any stress.

>> I think the ideal life is having enough spare time after work without any stress.

One of my friends has experienced that his blood pressure came down when he had a vacation with his family.

>> One of my friends had experienced having a low blood pressure when he had a vacation with his family.

Living without stress is the most important thing in life. 

>> Correct! 
People always tend to compare their life with others.

>> Correct!

We know it is the worst way in living our life. 

>> We know it is the worst way to live our lives. 
We need to know what we have to distinguish what is more important and rare important.

>> We need to know how to be able to distinguish the most important things in life.