What dream of yours do you want to come true?

2021-06-24 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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I want to be a rapstar, and I am wishing that it could be come true. If I want to be a rapper, I have to practice lyric writing, composing and producing. And I think the most important thing is lyric writting because I can compose and produce. Its quality is not a pro but I think I can do it well if I am doing this steadily. But lyric writting needs a lot of experience and feeling so I think it will be more harder than the others. But if I write lyric very long times, I think I can be great with that part.

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Hi [이름]! ^^

I hope that you\'ll become a very successful rap artist in the future. :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I\'m so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I want to be a rapstar, and I am wishing that it could be come true.

>> I want to be a rap star and I wish that would come true.

If I want to be a rapper, I have to practice lyric writing, composing and producing.

>> CORRECT

And I think the most important thing is lyric writting because I can compose and produce.

>> And I think the most important thing is lyric writing because I can compose and produce when I already know how to do that.

Its quality is not a pro but I think I can do it well if I am doing this steadily.

>> I\'m not a pro yet but I think I can do well in it.

But lyric writting needs a lot of experience and feeling so I think it will be more harder than the others.

>> But lyric writing needs a lot of experience and feelings so I think it will be more harder than the others.

But if I write lyric very long times, I think I can be great with that part.

>> If I practice this for longer times, I think I can do great in it.

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