What drink do you often have but best avoided?

2021-10-11 · 첨삭 강사 Aki

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I used to drink coke with meal. When I drank coke, I seemed that all my stress is gone. I had known that coke is very bad for my health. But I couldn’t stop. One day, my daughters said me why mom always drink coke, it is very bad for you!. I was very embarrassed. So I decided to stop it. Now, I secretly often drink energy drinks with meal. But I know I should stop drinking this beverage as possible as I stop. But it doesn’t go my way.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름] [이름]! How\'s your Sunday? I guess parents should set a good example haha.. Your daughters are smart and brave :)
Aki:)
I used to drink coke with meal.
>>> I used to drink coke during my meals.
When I drank coke, I seemed that all my stress is gone. I had known that coke is very bad for my health.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> Drinking coke became my stress reliever. I had known for long that coke is not good for our health
But I couldn’t stop.
>>>  CORRECT!
OR >>> But I couldn\'t help it
One day, my daughters said me why mom always drink coke, it is very bad for you!.
>>>  One day, my daughters told me that I always drink coke and it is very bad for me.
I was very embarrassed.
>>>  CORRECT!
OR >>> It was embarrassing.
So I decided to stop it.
>>>  CORRECT!
OR >>>  So i decided to stop drinking coke.
Now, I secretly often drink energy drinks with meal. But I know I should stop drinking this beverage as possible as I stop.
>>>   Now, I secretly often drink energy drinks with meal. But I know I should also stop drinking this beverage as soon as possible.
But it doesn’t go my way.
>>>  CORRECT!
OR >> But I also couldn\'t help it.

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